Simile's, Metaphors, Punchlines... Rhyme.
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D-Z-U-B-Z
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as if i was a Mendo Mulcher ive been out there on the grind/
like shrooms i bleed ya brain down the back of ya spine/
i aint Joe Montana but can pitch the rock on the field/
and dont need Jamie Lee Curtis to show ya the Blue Steel/
ima use this thread to sew up FP/
most of yall in here spittin garbage like Hefty/
and yall r playin Harvey Dent (two-face) so i keep it in the family/
i got tunes that show ya I-phone this I-candy/
pulled 40 licks without The Stones, from ya basement to ya attic/
so i can take wut i want as i inspect-ya-gadgets/
pimp if ya hoe aint gon put u up in that cougar/
better tell her heel toe and let her future produce her/
Dam i got a hitter on every line
like shrooms i bleed ya brain down the back of ya spine/
i aint Joe Montana but can pitch the rock on the field/
and dont need Jamie Lee Curtis to show ya the Blue Steel/
ima use this thread to sew up FP/
most of yall in here spittin garbage like Hefty/
and yall r playin Harvey Dent (two-face) so i keep it in the family/
i got tunes that show ya I-phone this I-candy/
pulled 40 licks without The Stones, from ya basement to ya attic/
so i can take wut i want as i inspect-ya-gadgets/
pimp if ya hoe aint gon put u up in that cougar/
better tell her heel toe and let her future produce her/
Dam i got a hitter on every line
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nutzy why u spittin this aint a fukin spatoon,
enuff with ya nothing ya fake with hot air like a baloon,
a bafoon for gods sake inspector gadget is old news,
and i must say quit gettin ur lyrics from you tube,
you spit ice but i write and ignite flame, HOT!
ruthless and flow snot, thick and sick lines and yours? NOT,
I gotta lotta nutzys on my nuts and u one in the same,
ya must spit bob seger cuz all i do is turn the page,
but ya eager to squash it, cuz you clean and im toxic,
just waitin in line to watch Gutty droppa nutty topic,
nutty as a snicker, ill top it while you b1tch bicker,
no buddys in grade days ya was a nerd and a nose picker,
man ya understand i didnt plan to have a dissin,
its just that this addition is seasoned more then a kitchin,
receive more then my gift, Nutzy give it up and quit it,
i know my words an addiction, but u just didnt give it,
deliver when ya spit it ,sh1t at least i came correct,
quiver cringe and rearrange what ya gon spit next?
HA ha, whaz up Nutzy, ya gonna come back?
enuff with ya nothing ya fake with hot air like a baloon,
a bafoon for gods sake inspector gadget is old news,
and i must say quit gettin ur lyrics from you tube,
you spit ice but i write and ignite flame, HOT!
ruthless and flow snot, thick and sick lines and yours? NOT,
I gotta lotta nutzys on my nuts and u one in the same,
ya must spit bob seger cuz all i do is turn the page,
but ya eager to squash it, cuz you clean and im toxic,
just waitin in line to watch Gutty droppa nutty topic,
nutty as a snicker, ill top it while you b1tch bicker,
no buddys in grade days ya was a nerd and a nose picker,
man ya understand i didnt plan to have a dissin,
its just that this addition is seasoned more then a kitchin,
receive more then my gift, Nutzy give it up and quit it,
i know my words an addiction, but u just didnt give it,
deliver when ya spit it ,sh1t at least i came correct,
quiver cringe and rearrange what ya gon spit next?
HA ha, whaz up Nutzy, ya gonna come back?
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E.T. Science
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I'm the cream of the crop, like cheese in a pot/
Boilin meltin point already reachin the top/
I'm as selfish as celcius when it comes to my heat/
I'm tappin on human flesh and magnifying murcury/
I'm a photographic laser photos on wooden paper/
Don't long last to my vapors, I'm a fundamental shaker/
Like earth quakes my plate shifts, my food I ate it/
So porcelain's lighter than a china doll that's brainless/
-E.T.
Boilin meltin point already reachin the top/
I'm as selfish as celcius when it comes to my heat/
I'm tappin on human flesh and magnifying murcury/
I'm a photographic laser photos on wooden paper/
Don't long last to my vapors, I'm a fundamental shaker/
Like earth quakes my plate shifts, my food I ate it/
So porcelain's lighter than a china doll that's brainless/
-E.T.
D-Z-U-B-Z
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faggot ull get slapped, get smoked like a sack/
i make a motha fuka drop the ball before he pick up the jacks/
i squashed beef cause u was cryin, now u lyin on the net/
first drumline then me sh1t who gon beat u next/
u know who u look like so i aint gon say sh1t/
if i were u id hit the doc and get a facelift/
u aint toxic, ill make ya empty ya pockets/
like wut u got-b1tch, instead of speakin u shoulda dropped it/
uve been jockin, knockin me from the moment i dropped in/
think im trippin offa you but it aint nothin but talkin/
i aint got nothin to prove, cause i know wut im about/
while u quick to rush the sh1t and start runnin ya mouth/
got some nerve in here sayin i need to clean up/
and the only time u go against me is when ya @ss team-up/
with one of these other users, they aint got no future/
how u takin sides with someone that spends all day on the computer/
go ahead and join the haters and stay wit ya colleagues/(spellcheck?)
i heard u was the one sukin dick for small fees/
u need to back off me, see i spit it authentic/
if i said it i meant it, middle finger for the critics/
u do wut u do, and me? im a do my thang/
quit spittin on FP GUTTY ur givin everyone migranes/ B1tch
i make a motha fuka drop the ball before he pick up the jacks/
i squashed beef cause u was cryin, now u lyin on the net/
first drumline then me sh1t who gon beat u next/
u know who u look like so i aint gon say sh1t/
if i were u id hit the doc and get a facelift/
u aint toxic, ill make ya empty ya pockets/
like wut u got-b1tch, instead of speakin u shoulda dropped it/
uve been jockin, knockin me from the moment i dropped in/
think im trippin offa you but it aint nothin but talkin/
i aint got nothin to prove, cause i know wut im about/
while u quick to rush the sh1t and start runnin ya mouth/
got some nerve in here sayin i need to clean up/
and the only time u go against me is when ya @ss team-up/
with one of these other users, they aint got no future/
how u takin sides with someone that spends all day on the computer/
go ahead and join the haters and stay wit ya colleagues/(spellcheck?)
i heard u was the one sukin dick for small fees/
u need to back off me, see i spit it authentic/
if i said it i meant it, middle finger for the critics/
u do wut u do, and me? im a do my thang/
quit spittin on FP GUTTY ur givin everyone migranes/ B1tch
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bass-sickz
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wit a name like gripp you must be a b****
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Bud Bunner
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im just being real
alot of the lines in here have been below average or people saying they hard hitters when they nothing really
at dzubs i wouldnt say **** the guide if i was you - you need it, alot of people do, u never stop learning no matter how good you are
alot of the lines in here have been below average or people saying they hard hitters when they nothing really
at dzubs i wouldnt say **** the guide if i was you - you need it, alot of people do, u never stop learning no matter how good you are
D-Z-U-B-Z
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i quickly-type so i can post a quick-reply/
most yall aint got sh1t-for-rhymes makin it hard for me to lift-my-eyes/
i dip-the-ride gettin-high just to get-me-by/
ill treat u like Jim Matheson, buried in a ditch-alive/
then switch-the-ride and act like it never happened/
got the police thinkin, wheres the killer, we better-catch-him/
and im forever-rappin, like elves during eultide/
in the bay all day where they let them tools-fly/
grind-and-flip-without-skateboards, find-a-lick-and-ya-take-more/
die-or-live-i-create-war, the kind-of-sh1t-im-awake-for/
u know wut BUD u really aint nothin but a fukin lil hater fool!! "or people saying they hard hitters when they nothing really". ur such a fag dude, im the only one that said i had hitters, and they were, so u can keep that below average bs to urself. if u really knew wut all of the things i was talkin about, all the simile's and sh1t, ud see it, or maybe u do and ur just hatin on me anyway cause im the only one in here goin against u. i dont need some punk @ss kid tellin me to use his guide, cause he thinks hes better than everyone in here. ive seen even u spit some pretty below average crap myself, but i aint callin u out on it like a cocky lil bastard.
in fact, u know wut, fuk it, im way too concentrated on these nuggets/
to wanna make anything of it, i aint worried about the public/
the trouble is, these haters wanna stop and knock my lyrics/
as if i care to hear it, oblivious to the fact im fearless/
i aint trippin i didnt slip-in with a written, sayin i was gangsta sh1t/
open ya ears Helen Keller "I Aint A Gangsta, B1tch"/
stay the fuk in UK, u aint no jewel of the south/
ur a self-centered Libirachi, with ya jewels in ya mouth/
u dont make the cut better like antiseptic plasters/
ya kinda more like one of those anesthetic actors/
ya parents musta forgot to use a contraceptive wrapper/
they were probly just drunk and u came accidentally after/
most yall aint got sh1t-for-rhymes makin it hard for me to lift-my-eyes/
i dip-the-ride gettin-high just to get-me-by/
ill treat u like Jim Matheson, buried in a ditch-alive/
then switch-the-ride and act like it never happened/
got the police thinkin, wheres the killer, we better-catch-him/
and im forever-rappin, like elves during eultide/
in the bay all day where they let them tools-fly/
grind-and-flip-without-skateboards, find-a-lick-and-ya-take-more/
die-or-live-i-create-war, the kind-of-sh1t-im-awake-for/
u know wut BUD u really aint nothin but a fukin lil hater fool!! "or people saying they hard hitters when they nothing really". ur such a fag dude, im the only one that said i had hitters, and they were, so u can keep that below average bs to urself. if u really knew wut all of the things i was talkin about, all the simile's and sh1t, ud see it, or maybe u do and ur just hatin on me anyway cause im the only one in here goin against u. i dont need some punk @ss kid tellin me to use his guide, cause he thinks hes better than everyone in here. ive seen even u spit some pretty below average crap myself, but i aint callin u out on it like a cocky lil bastard.
in fact, u know wut, fuk it, im way too concentrated on these nuggets/
to wanna make anything of it, i aint worried about the public/
the trouble is, these haters wanna stop and knock my lyrics/
as if i care to hear it, oblivious to the fact im fearless/
i aint trippin i didnt slip-in with a written, sayin i was gangsta sh1t/
open ya ears Helen Keller "I Aint A Gangsta, B1tch"/
stay the fuk in UK, u aint no jewel of the south/
ur a self-centered Libirachi, with ya jewels in ya mouth/
u dont make the cut better like antiseptic plasters/
ya kinda more like one of those anesthetic actors/
ya parents musta forgot to use a contraceptive wrapper/
they were probly just drunk and u came accidentally after/
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starchild
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even if we was paralell u couldnt be my equal
i stay on point on hip hop joints like church steples
i stay on point on hip hop joints like church steples
D-Z-U-B-Z
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snitches can say hello to one of my Lethal Weapons/
i ride up on my enemies, get em, and im Gone in 60 Seconds/
i just might turn Psycho and flip out like The Fly/
but at the end of the night its all about that American Pie/
motha fukas act Forrest Gump and i rip they Face-Off/
and duck the law hoppin fences for bout 16 Blocks/
im a Menace To Society behind the wheel of Christine/
make ya @ss Scream like it was midnight on Halloween/
its Childs Play, my wild ways, From the Cradle To The Grave/
i treat every day like its Friday and get Half-Baked/
i cant put my finger on it There's Something About Mary/
i gotta smoke its life or death like The Taste Of Cherry/
ill go Resident Evil and bring Extinction/
send every one of u mother fukers to The Kingdom/
no Peacemakers we Lost Boys in the Village Of The Damned/
id rather Die Hard than live soft, cursed with these Idle Hands/
Damn , i scared everybody away
i ride up on my enemies, get em, and im Gone in 60 Seconds/
i just might turn Psycho and flip out like The Fly/
but at the end of the night its all about that American Pie/
motha fukas act Forrest Gump and i rip they Face-Off/
and duck the law hoppin fences for bout 16 Blocks/
im a Menace To Society behind the wheel of Christine/
make ya @ss Scream like it was midnight on Halloween/
its Childs Play, my wild ways, From the Cradle To The Grave/
i treat every day like its Friday and get Half-Baked/
i cant put my finger on it There's Something About Mary/
i gotta smoke its life or death like The Taste Of Cherry/
ill go Resident Evil and bring Extinction/
send every one of u mother fukers to The Kingdom/
no Peacemakers we Lost Boys in the Village Of The Damned/
id rather Die Hard than live soft, cursed with these Idle Hands/
Damn , i scared everybody away
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Bud Bunner
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Stop getting so up yourself, you cant take criticism.
im telling you how it is, your flow isnt great and content isnt all that good.
wanna talk ****, do it on a track if not, take the criticism.
you **** wasnt hitting, trust me
dont write a diss to me in here wanna do that call me out if not hush
lol @ you thinking that **** was hitting 'all the similes and ****' HAHA
LOL even more at you trying to use my line against me that antisepetic plasters line is the best one you dropped in here, wonder why? plasters and actors? good rhyme
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im telling you how it is, your flow isnt great and content isnt all that good.
wanna talk ****, do it on a track if not, take the criticism.
you **** wasnt hitting, trust me
dont write a diss to me in here wanna do that call me out if not hush
lol @ you thinking that **** was hitting 'all the similes and ****' HAHA
LOL even more at you trying to use my line against me that antisepetic plasters line is the best one you dropped in here, wonder why? plasters and actors? good rhyme
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D-Z-U-B-Z
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alright, alright, alright, im tired of hearin this sh1t, got no flow? it aint even possible for me to write somthin that aint on beat, so my flow is flawless, and content? i burned u with the one verse, over half of it was real sh1t, personal sh1t, not just " yo im hannibal eat u up like cannibals" nah, i took real sh1t and turned it into rhymes, found some sh1t i could use against u that u used before, "jewel of the south", "anticeptic plasters", and used em better than u did to diss u for talkin sh1t. u got handled on that verse and ur just mad. and about the criticism, i can take that sh1t all day, i always do, but not when someone wants to purposely be an @sshole and insult me by tellin me HE thinks im worse than average, especially the most cocky ma fuka in here thinkin hes the sh1t. ILL PUT U ON BLAST ANYTIME FOOL, i aint fiitin to waste my time makin a track when ill i gotta do is hop on the computer and type.
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LSinBTonez
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Get em hooked by the hooks call me fisherman/
Toss them lines out, then i reel em in/
Toss them lines out, then i reel em in/
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mc.majik
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another thread falls victim to some e-thugs ego's
sigh...
sigh...
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Bud Bunner
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look this is the last thing i will say on the matter dzubs
flowing isnt just about hitting the beats, if ur as good at rapping as u say u are then u would understand that. Rappers have different flows, different basic rhyme schemes and different signature ways of switching up there flows. Different ways of flipping the techniques of writing into there own creations. Flowing is about the quality of the rhyming and how the syllables blend together whilst being in time with the beat. Its also how the rhymes are delivered, its also about breathe control and knowing where to pause and where to just add more syllables to long out the bar. amongst other techniques
what u did in that verse was nothing, thats my honest opinon - ur not going to agree - some people will some peeps wont, i dont care i know what i know.
but lol at me getting handled...go put me on blast then go set up a battle thread or suttin. no...okay...ur antiseptic plaster line was hardly any different - my punch hit harde urs werent even nearly hitting, the jewels in ur mouth line was better still only average hitter tho, same old 'ur a fag suck a dick' bull****.
u seem to rate urself more than your worth which is why my opinon of your verses seemed harsher than normal but never the less it was real and honest opinon.
im going to get some real writers from my old site to come join, then your see why im saying 90 percent of writers on here are average or below with a few exceptions.
anyway, thats all you might agree u might not. i dont care i know what i know.
peace
flowing isnt just about hitting the beats, if ur as good at rapping as u say u are then u would understand that. Rappers have different flows, different basic rhyme schemes and different signature ways of switching up there flows. Different ways of flipping the techniques of writing into there own creations. Flowing is about the quality of the rhyming and how the syllables blend together whilst being in time with the beat. Its also how the rhymes are delivered, its also about breathe control and knowing where to pause and where to just add more syllables to long out the bar. amongst other techniques
what u did in that verse was nothing, thats my honest opinon - ur not going to agree - some people will some peeps wont, i dont care i know what i know.
but lol at me getting handled...go put me on blast then go set up a battle thread or suttin. no...okay...ur antiseptic plaster line was hardly any different - my punch hit harde urs werent even nearly hitting, the jewels in ur mouth line was better still only average hitter tho, same old 'ur a fag suck a dick' bull****.
u seem to rate urself more than your worth which is why my opinon of your verses seemed harsher than normal but never the less it was real and honest opinon.
im going to get some real writers from my old site to come join, then your see why im saying 90 percent of writers on here are average or below with a few exceptions.
anyway, thats all you might agree u might not. i dont care i know what i know.
peace
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