The general vibe and idea of this track is nice, but the sounds...not so much. They just sound very pre-set/corny to me. Try fashioning your own original sounds with synthesizers. Another thing I noticed was that some of these percussive instruments aren't controlled very well. The kick drum could definitely use a transient shaper...or just use the amplitude envelope on the sampler you used with that sample to cut down on the tail of that waveform. It'll clean it up a whole bunch. Also, don't forget the power of EQ! I noticed a lot of mud in this mix, and every track/sound in this track could definitely benefit from some non-destructive EQ (meaning reducing gain instead of increasing gain).