Yes it could, I have songs with choruses simple like that. It's how catchy the melody is really. The catchier the melody, the more you can get away with lyrically in my opinion. You could try throwing an, "Oh" or "Ah" or "Yer know" if it'd fit or work at the beginning or end of each line. I actually think the words sound great actually. Not lyrically out there but then it depends on the context of the song I suppose.
Like The Beatles, "Get Back" has a simple chorus:-
"Get Back"
The Beatles
(Chorus)
Get back, get back, get back to where you once belonged,
Get back, get back, get back to where you once belonged.
Get back Jojo.