This is hot... written I've been working on. Feedback please.

[E.T. Science]

Yo yo, E.T. is up in here/
Have no fear/
I can roll with the beat/
I can roll with a beer/
If yall dont like me/
Just sit your butts down/
I'm gonna be rollin/
Through this lamer rough town/

I dont even know what my name is/
But my name isn't fred/
It's real what I'm spittin/
and I'll be spittin till I'm dead/

(hook)

E.T. will kick you in the face/
If you try to take his place/
You cant dethrone him/
You will never own him/

verse2:

Im back again my hook is over/
Got you runnin like a clover/
On the ground, that I found/
Now I got good luck/
But it sucks yo/
Here we go go/
Let's get this stuff rocking/
And we'll get our glocks cocking/

I am living in a world/
Of pain but I know love/
Like the stuff that I'm writin/
You just cant get enough of/

(Hook)

Verse3;

This is my last verse/
It will put you in a hearse/
It'll hurt worse/
Than the rapping of fred durst/
Ice Ice baby is what my idol used to sing/
But now I got my bling/
And I roll in caddilacs/

Now im done with this rap/
It's better than you all/
I realise that I am the best/
I never will ever fall.

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Man I been workin on this forever, let me know what you guys think... I think I'm really improving as far as wordplay goes etc... let me know your opinions.

 

[MVP]

i think that it has no meaning. You should try to write songs that have a meaning. Dont be like all the other stupid rappers who talk about being all of that and having all of this. Read up on shakespeare, everything he wrote has a meaning.

 

[E.T. Science]

Lol dang some moreppl should have replied, this was my april fools joke... hope yalld ont think I'm really that wack

Thanks for the reply man. PEACE!

-E.T.

 

[MVP]

i kinda felt bad for u. That is truely some nasty sh!t.

 

[E.T. Science]

I know man... I wrote as badly as I could without completely not rhyming... anyways, whatever!

-E.T.

 

[Wack]

Lol dang some moreppl should have replied, this was my april fools joke... hope yalld ont think I'm really that wack

Thanks for the reply man. PEACE!

-E.T.

dont u scare me like that again....lol

 

[Mattnificent]

i tried to think of sumthin 2 or 3 times to reply but they was all mean as hell....lol.....thank da lord

 

[Semaj]

that was some of your best work ever bro, keep it up!

 

[E.T. Science]

thanks semaj I know if I just keep praciticing ill keep getting better!

-E.T.