I like the concept! For advice on your drop, maybe the 123 vocal chop is a little too loud? The overall loudness of the mix seems to drop off after you transition into the main idea, giving a feeling of less energy. Sometimes this is the intention but I get the feeling that in this song it wasnt? Also, I would recommend dequantizing some of your sounds a little. To me, everything sounds very "on the grid"; try to introduce some swing/ humanization into your notes and chords for a less robotic feel. You could try adding some very simple and subtle automation, either through lfo's or by hand on filters, pitches, and other fx to create a little more movement in some of the sounds as I found they were a little static. Mix wise, maybe the drums could be a little louder and the midrange "synth" sound you have after the drop could be lowered in volume? Overall, great start, keep producing, the idea is definitely there.