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RileyLow<3

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Heartstopper
Riley Low


Verse 1:

I can't believe there was a time,
I didn’t even know you,
Feels like years ago,
you showed up outta the blue,
Rocked my world, changed my life,
Gave me a whole new view,
Who knew you’d be gone so soon...?
And I've made so many mistakes,
All throughout my life,
Now I'm lying on my bed,
Just tryna get through tonight
Because I know I messed up bad,
Tell me something new
Who knew you’d be gone so soon...?

Hook:

Between movie nights, and late night drives,
A smile stops my heart and just one kiss revives,
I'm addicted to you, it tells me to hold on tight,
Probably be best if you're outta my life~

Chorus:

Because you're a heartstopper,
If we stay, we’ll end up dead,
Right person at the wrong time,
And it's all just in my head,
And you're a heartstopper,
Thinking of just you tonight,
Light dreams and dark fantasies,
I just want to hold on tight
To you~
I just want to hold on tight
To you~

Verse 2
I can't believe that after everything,
That you stayed with me,
After everything I put you through,
The late nights and the dreams,
The anxiety and the worry,
Running around your head in leagues,
All I can say is just blame me,
And now I watch,
As my mistakes settle in the dust,
All the hopes and dreams,
Of what we could become,
Of that little yacht,
In the bright blue sea,
All I can say is just blame me,

Verse 3
Between the late-night chats,
And crying together at three,
I wish that nothing had changed,
And that we could both just be,
Happy like we were, you and me,
Yeah, and all anyone had heard,
And it's us against the world,
With the cuddles and the kisses,
And the awkward arm at movies,
The innocence and the love,
Then ‘bio’ at the library,
All of these good times I spent with you,
And it was all anyone had heard,
That it was us against the world, ~

Chorus:
Because you're a heartstopper,
If we stay, we’ll end up dead,
Right person at the wrong time,
And it's all just in my head,
And you're a heartstopper,
Thinking of just you tonight,
Light dreams and dark fantasies,
I just want to hold on tight
To you~
I just want to hold on tight
To you~
To you~
Because you're a heartstopper,
If we stay, we’ll end up dead,
Right person at the wrong time,
And it's all just in my head,
And you're a heartstopper,
Thinking of just you tonight,
Light dreams and dark fantasies,
I just want to hold on tight
To you~
I just want to hold on tight
To you~
To you~
To you~

Final Verse:

Keep being told its unhealthy,
That I'm dependent and I'm lost,
But when I'm with you,
I don’t see it through the fog, ~


Riley Low <3
 
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