Hey man, thanks for your feedback on my beat...much appreciated.
This beat is nice, I feel it could do with a bit more instrumentation just to give it a bit more progression but it's tight.
I would def be looking to add a distorted effect to that chorus, make it more faded and ambient...I think that would def hit better...
I would also look at getting your vocal mix right, it doesn't sound that polished to me at all..for your next track I'd also focus on your vocal tones in terms of delivery and pitch. More variety here would be key.
Good job, keep going...!
This is good for starting out lyrically and I think it's very promising over all.