I think that your track could work better without vocals. It's my opinion, but if you dig more on the melody and sounds it could be a great track, and more "yours"? I don't know. Thanks for sharing
It's hard for me to say anything because the vocals are kinda distracting for me. Once the vocals dropped out, I started noticing the talent a bit. I definitely wanna check out your Soundcloud. I just followed you and about to scope your music Keep writing and keep exploring! Peace!