I definitely think that your remix provided the perfect musical piece for this rhyme. I like the non-traditional drums. I like that the track itself is kind of low-key and it's one of those tracks that kind of compliment the lyrics perfectly. For this type of track, I think that's important. Other than that, it's hard for me to really "critique" it, to be honest. It's not my favorite type of music, by any means. I just know that I believe you to be talented when it comes to this music game. You keep working and you've got it, no doubt. Great work.
Thanks for the feedback on my song. I'm sorry you didn't like the beat! BUT! I'm glad that you were feeling the vocals. I'll be working hard to get the mix better in the future.