The lyrics are nice, the beat is cool. But the overall eq could be a little better. Maybe try turning off the bass frequencies on the vocal track eq. It'll sit nicer with the beat. The vocal kind of drowns out the beat. Other than that its cool.
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Yep as previously said the only thing here is the EQ. I feel like the drums can stand out a bit more, and the voice could use a bit of a cut as well.
Everything else is nice though.