First of all, I love the song! I have some inputs to the song too
Lets take them first:
Add a soaring pop chorus. I will be a monsterhit with a soaring hooky great pop chorus.
Add a noise gate to the boomy kickdrum and snap off the reverbboom on it after some fractions of a second. I like the idea of booming the kick but this is overdone, leading to listening fatique. But the song itself and the video was so good that I had no problem hanging in.
Also, less reverb on snare will make it more contemporary-sounding.
The Video. Great idea/shooting. HEre is my 2 cents:
Start the music with the intro pictures (together) and cut down the clipping speed of the intro. People dont need 30 sec no-music intros to get the point. Kill your darlings, if you know what I mean.
More pictures, more clippingspeed, faster fadeoutin transitions.
Other than that, add more scenes from the car suddenly while u are faceshotting him inside against that white wall. Cross clipping like that from one scene to another and back can be powerful if clipped in a good way.
Else; I love it. The song is good, his voice is interesting and his appearance on the screen is good.
Keep it up.