A lot of nice ideas but it doesn't have the quite the energy it needs. I think if you really nailed down the mixing (like the bass/kick comment above) and tweaked with compression, eq, and saturation quite a bit it would really bang. A couple drum noises could be swapped out for different higher quality sounds (like the snare drum, which sounds a little thin) and it would really give it a more professional sound overall. The track is pretty cool though, I like it. Just keep tweaking and improving the mix and it could really crack through nicely.
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