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    Opinion on some lyrics plz

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    As i sit on my throne
    Knowing I'm not alone
    God with me not on my own
    Trying since the age of 13 to be grown
    Let it be known
    Que esta pasando en el pueblo de brush
    Todos en un rush
    Losing all the trust in people
    Once were equal
    Whats the sequel
    Inequality I got lost in
    One day we will win
    Never doubt our ability
    Its doubt that causes instability
    Facing consequences
    Mending fences
    Losing freinds
    When I acted like pretend always was less
    My minions deserve the best
    Expect nothing less than for me to accept
    Reality for what i make it
    Made my mistakes no longer can i fake it
    Had trust and love but I chose to break it
    Addiction had me losing it so dont mistake it
    Would rather not cause friction but consequences I be facing
    Hate that it goes out tof control
    All that hate that penetrates the soul
    Created something so jaded in the ways of old
    Life can be cold
    I'll never fold
    Right sight something to behold

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    It can be seen that you wanted to convey your deep feelings, but to be honest, I could not understand the essence.

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    Quote Originally Posted by ben_john7 View Post
    It can be seen that you wanted to convey your deep feelings, but to be honest, I could not understand the essence.
    Essence is written on the pages the lines say what they say
    Its perspective that may be lacking or Idk its just me trying to get on track after a long ass battle with addiction and all the judgement i face because of said battle... Most of it could be in my head of course yet I know I'm not alone in this battle
    I guess i jjst wanted to convey the perspective in which we live inthe world lime .indset of an addict u know..

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    Thank you for telling me. As I said, it is clear that you tried to present feelings.

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    i mean....its ok. a little corny, but ok

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    I think the song has a few good lines, but you've put too much emphasis on getting everything to rhyme.

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