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    How are my lyrics?

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    I picked my self up from where snakes left me down
    And I知 seein you flashing in my mind cop sirens without the sound
    And I知 hearin red like I gotta kill count
    that I account, Cuz you always leave me red blue and and loud


    And I never kill nobody, but that don稚 keep me bound
    If you keep standing, I値l take a second round
    Cuz I知 writing my bullets and loading them into my sound
    And when I play a bass that shakes the place, I make the gun reverberate loud


    I do this for me, never for the lick
    I carve out my home, out your gold bricks
    I do it to keep my mind three to the six
    Cuz I知 Heath Ledger playin these pencil tricks


    I goin through life, the second witch trial
    I ain稚 a witch I知 just a clown usin blood to make my smile
    If you bring a knife to a fist fight
    Then I値l bring an automatic to your final rites


    I知 not a rapper I知 a writer
    You could never say I知 not a writer
    I starta write every time I gotta be a rapper
    But when I rap I become the storyteller


    I say what doesn稚 kill you only makes you stranger
    That痴 it痴 okay if it is my life I wager
    If get i stranger I become the embodiment of danger
    I think at light speed like I知 runnin like Evan jager


    I知 like the joker
    I知 jokin my jokes till your gone and then I become Joseph kerr
    Over time my mind starts to deter
    But when you come back you can count blood spills and burns


    My ideologies
    I知 in this world metaphysically
    Heterodoxies
    Cuz my theology got me thinking my insanity isn稚 an unorthodoxy


    In my crazed mind I like to take pride
    But for a moment let me set that aside
    You see i also gotta partner in crime
    Harley Quinn chillin at my side like Bonnie and Clyde
    釘ut Mr J., First Bonnie died
    Just like you, Harley, just after you cried
    When you realized that I betrayed you for homicide
    There痴 a red smile on her face, wedding dress stain,
    I think I値l keep it safe for the next bride

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    Hey I'm sorry but I'd like to see more of your story in there. What's this about?
    Maybe you have something to say, but it seems you still need to figure out what it is...
    Keep working..

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    I would say focus less on the rhymes/Schemes and more on what you're actually trying to say... Less is more in some cases
    Also while repetition can sound good if used properly try not to repeat rhymes so close together (Sound, Loud).
    Keep writing

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