Is this chorus disgusting or pornographic?

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FuriousFred

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Hi!

I`m german and so I don`t know all the nuances of the english language. I´m not sure whether or not this chorus is ok or if it`s already pornographic or disgusting... please tell me your opinion. It`s for an RnB-song about sex like you can hear from Ne-Yo or Trey Songz, but I don`t want the lyrics to be pornographic containing the f-word or something like that....

"You`re sitting above
I feel your body next to mine
Get it deeper, get it faster
come, breathe with me"

What do you think?

---------- Post added at 08:41 PM ---------- Previous post was at 08:39 PM ----------

I asked a friend and he thinks it`s totally ok, but I want to have a second opinion ;)
 
not gross at all. im not really into that type of music, but its really not that explicit.
 
Is this for real?

The lyrics aren't disgusting or pornographic at all. I really don't see how this was ever an issue, lol.
 
if a child cant understand what the lyrics are saying on a mental level. then you got no problems bro. radio cant blank none of that stuff out
 
The get it deeper get it faster part is a little inappropriate but the rest is okay. If you really were really concerned, I'm pretty sure you can change those lines to something else.
 
Bipola said:
Is this for real?

The lyrics aren't disgusting or pornographic at all. I really don't see how this was ever an issue, lol.
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thats why he asked if it was or not because he did know if our vocabulary in the english language was different in that sort of sense....
on the other hand i dont think you have a problem...i mean ive heard plies say some nasty stuff and this doesnt even come close. keep doin what your doin bro
 
Lyricist needed!

Ok, I recorded the chorus. Is there anybody who likes the song and could write the verses to make this track a nice erotic r n b-song?

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[Hey, I know I`m no good singer... ;-) But I recorded it only for demo purposes.. imagine a nice r n b-singer is on the track instead! :-)
 
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Thank you for your feedback!! But sorry, I didn`t understand it completely, did you mean that you like the beat but the "love and erotic-topic" doesn`t match the atmosphere of the beat?
Do you think I only have to let somebody other sing? Or do you advise to change the topic of the lyrics completely?

---------- Post added 01-10-2011 at 11:20 PM ---------- Previous post was 01-09-2011 at 08:32 PM ----------

Ok, I deleted the link, but thanks for listening and your advise!
 
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