I see what you're goin for, you lookin to get that 'big beat' or anthem type beat, great idea....the only thing is mixes for those types of beats have to near-perfect. The structure's their you just can't use stock sounds for these kinds of tracks ya know, search around for some sick sound kits. BTW wat DAW do you use I can probably help you out with sounds. As far as mixes, this sounds pretty good just remember, percussion need mixing love too!