So I checked out the song.
1. The introduction to the song is too long it gets too repetitive and bores me as the listener. No excitement. We as listeners are screaming for something not predictable and drawn out.
2. Mixing is your biggest issue here. The bassline was too high and muffled the entire beat. I listened on headphones and on my speakers in my studio.
3. Arrangement you have no sense of direction it seems like your kind of all over the place and dont really know what it is your trying to say to your audience. remember the music itself has to speak before there is an actual lyricist on it.
4. Your sounds could be a little outdated or you can try collaborating with different instruments. Alot of them sound out of place.
Solutions:
1. Shorten your intro or simply add to it build it up into your chorus or into a verse or bridge. your choice.
2. Start by looking up different tutorials online. Examples: pensados place or the recording revolution are awesome sites with hands on tutorials
3. Write out how you would like the song to be arranged this is a must man you dont want to be all over the place. Example: intro-chorus-verse-chorus-verse-chorus-bridge-chorus-outro an idea but formulate your plan and idea to attack it better when putting it together
4. Update your sounds grab some nice kits or like i said manipulate your sounds by changing the key you are playing the drum in. Layer your drums so that way they may have more punch and excitement to them.
I hope this helps i was just scratching the surface as we can all always improve on something.
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