First thing I notice:
"Damn, this Beat is dope!"
Second thing I notice:
"It's kinda hard to make his words out, I gotta get adjusted to his voice a bit"
You got a raspy voice so I know words blend a bit more, but maybe try enunciating even more than you already are. I found that just practicing the lyrics really slow like "Once-I-End-ed-Up-On-A-Farm" kinda like a robot pace but not in a robot tone- it helps I noticed. After like the first 2 couplets your voice is more clear, I think it was because you were whispering but you can still make it more clear at the start.
44sec in at this point
Third thing I noticed is you're charisma is nice, I think if you had more clear vocals (weather it be the productions fault or just your voice) I'd really get sucked in. I believe you when you rap. That means a lot to me.
In conclusion I'd just say make your vocals stick out, even though the beat is mellow and I prefer deep voiced rappers, your voice kinda blends with the track it doesn't stick out. My theory on that would just be raise the pitch up in your voice slightly. That said I look forward to your next song!
