IMO, the mixing is the better part of the song. Your flow slides so far off from the beat that I wonder why it even has drums at all.
I'm sure you can do better than that. Disappointed.
Considering this line:
"I haven't told my mom that I'm not going to college, I'll buy a few books on political knowledge but rap is my honest only option." [sic]
Don't put all of your eggs in one basket.
At your current level of skill, staking your future on rap would be like staking your future on winning the lottery - Without buying a ticket.
If you improve, you'll still be in a sea full of people with similar skill levels and lyrical content. You'd still be counting on winning the lottery, but at least you'd have a ticket in hand.
On one hand, you definitely received more than $5 worth of a person's time.
After all, the guy charged you
less to mix and master
the entire song than I charge people to process
one individual stem for a mix.
On the other hand, any amount of time and/or money spent polishing a turd is wasted time and/or money.
You can definitely improve as long as you actually take the criticism to heart and strive to become better, rather than becoming defensive.
-Ki
Salem Beats