Simile's, Metaphors, Punchlines... Rhyme.

jyfresh said:
slim...look at yourself in the mirror. then re-evuluate what you doing. you cant see me lyriclly but this is the internet who raps over the internet. and besides....my **** is real. what type of work have u possibly put in on the streets? this is y hiphop is dead.

dog i just listen to your myspace. this **** is 2 funny. damn man everybody wanna be a ****ing gangster. if u lived 1 week in my neighborhood you be crying like **** lil slim.

iliveit....urapit

www.myspace.com/youngidc

dont let the computer fool u champ

i dont recall too many people in here carrying on gangster. cats are writing in line with the title of the thread... similies, metaphors and punchlines. no one so far has mentioned guns, drugs, pimpin etc etc. so show me who here is trying to be a gangster.

i aint checked out gutty's myspace yet, but nobody on this thread at least was writing/rapping about how you live j.

yeah this is the net and all that, but this aint a battle thread or a site for emcee's. this is a site for producers. songwriting is a part of producing. most cats here arent pro's, or else they probably wouldnt be on this site asking for tips etc.

im keen to see you write some verses in this thread.
 
I swallow birds like kirby, word?
in mid flight
knock 2 birds down at a derby winning money absurdley
hit the damn lottoooo!!!
a malloto an albino
mixed race and mixtapes for your boombox and your vinyl


lol wtf
 
six metric suns flare as i eye stare
takes out the fun when the spectrum light runs
cold plume of old doom dominion of cobra snakes
ashes to fascist floating in a dead lake..............
 
really weak punches in here

im ready cos the words-we-got in every-verse-be-hot
so battling me's 'fuking scary' like eddie-murphy-was
 
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I'd find it 'Hard to Die' like screening bruce willis
going 3 to 1 one of hip hops 'Hun to Tilla's'

hows that? :)
 
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s'alrite

punches should be technical but delivered in a simplistic way, for maximum impact.

ill always cum above you like tall pornstar

you could clone yourself, still wont get a W

imma kill you two and i dont mean bonos band

ill come before u like the letter t

you crew could be a band from the 80s and wouldnt bee gees

im dead lee like bruce

etc...
 
i kill kids on tracks like jamie boulger

^look it up

theres no light at the end of the tunnel just ask diana

ill kill you...son like chris beniot

wouldnt noah flow if you built an arc

wouldnt be a lille nice if you were from france

my team stay flyer than the mighty ducks
were bigger on road than nintey trucks

i kill it on the web like a spider does

i wish i was spiderman, so i could shoot the web

^from track called '**** the internet'

girls call me fred flintstone i make the bedrock

^old played ****, that nearly every rapper has a version of

im the illest in time like clocks with cancer

i wanna die stoned like jesus did

etc... etc...
 
i push green like i was stocking vegetables at kroger

I right(write) words like spell check

i lay down information like a cable installer

your chips as short as an empty pringle can

ill batter ya balls in frying grease and feed you homemade dunkin do-nuts

you need to receed ur statement like phil collins hair line

im a pimp in a melon but my can't elope just got whored on

im connecting empty spots like conenct the dots

my words are easily read like i hit the bold button

I fight tropical so you get a nice hawain punch

like shrimp ill leave you skewed

I make better beats like a step dad with a belt

my tracks are fresh like a newly laid railroad

i make a bigger buzz then pissing off a bee hive

:D Ha ha just a few in the same style as budburner, no follow rhyme, just the punch:bigeyes:

I just thought about this, How many people you think come in here and copy lyrics and use them on tracks? I see peoples names at the bottom, and theyll be in here for awile and not post anything and then be gone. GUARENTEE ITS A COPY PASTE THING GOING ON.
 
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you wouldnt go out on a high if you were dating on drugs

some nice punches there gutty some weaker ones but still i liked the spellcheck one alot.
 
i could explain it to you if you don't get it ;)

jp, i know how that is, i liked that t and Next to "U" one...
 
Gutty502 said:
I just thought about this, How many people you think come in here and copy lyrics and use them on tracks? I see peoples names at the bottom, and theyll be in here for awile and not post anything and then be gone. GUARENTEE ITS A COPY PASTE THING GOING ON.

I dont think u need to worry urself too much over that one pimp ur lyrics would have to be good for someone to want to bite ya sh1t.
 
Dzubz coming with the fight talk

drop a punchline or dont run your mouth about other peoples.
 
oh no, u dont even know bud, we got history me and dzubz. ive battled him and his lil friend dumblines. they hardcore hip gangsters from a rich part of east bay cali
 
Gangsta Gangsta

If mutha****a was gangsta he wouldnt spend time talking **** about peoples punchlines on a web forum.

Hes bout as gangsta as kanyes mascot.

It really annoys me when people run there mouth about peoples rhymes/beats on here but dont drop anything thereselve. Like 'Your **** is whack but im not showing you my **** - its too good for your ears.'

thats some bull****
 
yea, he is on some bull****, he has posted his lyrics though and they aint that good, and yea hes far from gangsta
 
ytehyhetyhetyh
everytime i have some good **** i get auto paragraphed!!!! hello homeland security/big broter/site owner haters HA!
 
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I'll have you knocked up like a door on halloween/
Bearin a child like you slept with an ursine fiend/
(knocked up as in pregnant, knocked as in on a door... bearing a child = knocked up, ursine = bear... kinda silly)

I'ma read your star signs and autograph your chest/
Sting you like scorpio and leave you deformed like aries' head/
(star signs = zodiac and/or autographs from the stars... sting you like scorpio, scorpio's a scorpion... aries is a ram, so has horns coming out of his head...)

All I could come up with off the top of my head..

-E.T.
 
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