damn if anyone knows the thread that had this in it please put it up. sounds like a good sample.
as for yours...
i like the intro, although i think you should take out the pretty baby part...
and when the beat drops its nice. from there it gets worse. you could use the vocal samples better and arrange them better although the melody is nice its kinda choppy. and you need to get rid of them factory drums.besides that...its real nice. oh and the pause is bad too. take that out and just work on making it sound more cohesive to the point that you could hear some one rappin on it.
