hey man,
nice work. i agree with the cliches though. There needs to be more dynamic contrast because after all, that is what writing for an orchestra is about. With that many instruments you have so much freedom to explore textures and pass around melodies and counter melodies and each time it will sound different and expressive. What i think you need to work on is learning the sound and texture of the instruments and how to take full advantage of an orchestra. For example, the sound you have is very full, that is exciting and all but to heighten this you need a contrast. Maybe try a completely striped back section with glock, bass clarinet and flute with minimal string support using the same melodic and chordal themes with a slight variation. Try using cannons and call and response between the instruments to open up the texture possibilities. Then bring back in the full sound and you will be suprised how big the sound will be. To emphasise a 'BIG' sound, use french horns ascending or following the cellos. Make sure they have their 'golden moments' cutting through the mix. That is what makes a great score, a series of'golden moments' and i find that french horns often have potential for that. Listen to anything from Stravinsky for ideas on percussion scores cos he knows his stuff! 'The Firebird Suite' will give you ideas on theme and variation and stripping sound and textures. Anyway, hope this was helpful. Good luck@
- Dane