short rap sample (let me know what you think?)

[flre0007]

I am working on a rap and want to know if I'm on the right track. Tell me what you thinkAttachment 35884

[JD101]

Hard to make out what your saying...

[RadioactiveBeats]

I think you need a better mic and those kicks sound like the default fl studio kicks the melody is good though

[Planetary]

It sounds really good but I can't really get what your saying neither

[MC DARK]

The flow sounds alright, but putting your voice on the right side of my headphone, and putting the beat on the left side, makes it annoying, don't do that anymore, please.