rap attack (feedback) (lyrics only, workin on beat)

aakalitkavi

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RAP ATTACK
this is an emergency...
out of expectancy..
i'm gonna use as much of laymency..
so that you can see...
My life's latency...
Soon turnin out to be a prodigy..
So 'no apologies'...
Nor bein 'not afraid'....
Or dissin 'my mom'...
Coz she's not being paid...
For this shit that i write...
It's just tricks of trade...
On an honest page..
I haven't got laid...
For three months now...
Guys feel the pain...
Shootin jets of cum..
Out ma window pane....
Don't know if you know..
What i've been sayin...
And if i wait anymore...
I'll be a virgin again....
i think my mojo's gone..
But when i see them horns...
My stick gets stuck...
And ****! I feel thorns...
And the heat then just keeps turnin on...
So video-one gets one more user on...
(chorus)
I guess i'm going out of track..
So everybody kick their porno racks..
Also the britney spear's video tracks...
Coz yo witnessin what's called a rap attack...
(Verse 2)
my friends are usually as dumb as me..
Coz When they like a chick..
They get thick, and lick their upper lip..
Going straight...
"excuse me, may i have your number please"...
"SLAP", "da fuq? There was no hard on geese"...
"its ok, at least you can facebook me...
So that when yo guys dick gets freezed...
And when his paycheck's up..
And his card is ceased..
Or when he says no...
To give you the car keys....
Or on the bed, while givin you a **** he pees...
It's either time to leave..
Or to call the police...
That's the time when you can..
'Accidently' bump into me...
And we can skip straight..
To the part where you **** me..
(chorus)
i guess i'm goin out of track...
Ya'll may enjoy yo evenin snacks...
Or you can lick yo chica's racks..
yo gonna feel now wrath of my wrap attack....
(verse 3)
well lets have a look...
What do we have in store?
***** please, when you get in...
Make sure, that you close the door...
Coz there are ******* like you...
Waitin out for more...
if you got no skills..
You can walk right out the door...
Don't waste my time...
Just do yo crime...

So that i can just..

one plus my score..
And if you like an 8'inch dick you whore.....
I'll make sure i make you beg for more..
(chorus)
I guess i took u guys off the track..
so Can you please shut the **** up and get back...
To uh boring lives and just wish that...
i dun get another rap attack...
-rajiv chaube (rjv aka aakalit kavi)
(any offence to any girl is purely fictuious and should not be taken seriously. But for who i mean this whole song, two words " **** YOU *****"......Ya thats two words... ***** is her name)
 
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