A new song..

[JewieThomsen]

Wrote this a couple of days ago, would like some feedback.

Leave your perfume girl,
it don't matter,
you put me on the shit you can't smell,
it matters
but baby i can tell,
we don't need no help,
you keep the pain at bay
if forever,
you'll stay


bring the drug, baby i can bring my pain,
bring the lights, baby i can bring the dark,
bring the angel, baby i can bring the devil,
make you dance with the devil,
make you dance with me


Baby, you're my drug,
you're my novacane,
you're my mental block,
you keep me sane, ease the pain,



mold in the drawers,
rotting in the shadows,
outside the windows
let me see that body,
baby be my pusher,
give me my injection,
added to my collection,
you're here,
but in the mirror,
aint no reflection

bring the drug, baby i can bring my pain,
bring the lights, baby i can bring the dark,
bring the angel, baby i can bring the devil,
make you dance with the devil,
make you dance with me

Baby, you're my drug,
you're my novacane,
you're my mental block,
you keep me sane, ease the pain,

Thanks in Advance

 

[Mantown]

Nice dude. That inspired me! Thanks! Check out some of my posts?

 

[JewieThomsen]

Thanks pal ! Sure i will check em out.
Anyone else got anything to add ?

 

[charlie morgan]

nice bro keep it up 10 on the lyrics

 

[JewieThomsen]

Thanks pal ! Glad you like it - anyone else got something to add?

 

[dkcito]

they straight

 

[Kidd'Nappy]

Nice lyrical, but not a lot of feelings

 

[JewieThomsen]

thanks, i agree, there might not be that much feeling to this