New song, the 1st verse

**Hycore** · 05-07-2012

My futures told, for there I'm cold.
Another sentimental value.
Statements made for there to fade.
There's nothing left to argue.
But when you speak, your mind sets ease.
To the world below to control you.
Tempers flare, well aware.
Of that feeling that's on the menu.
Bridges cave and towers made.
Preaching to whom your not s'pposed to.
Defensive lines and warning signs.
Aren't there to protect you.

**Mightyreal** · 05-29-2012

It's pretty weak.

**WondaMuzik** · 06-01-2012

its ight..

**karmad** · 06-15-2012

nice song

**Majick H** · 06-22-2012

For me, hard to judge without hearing a melody with it, because it could sound completely different than just reading text. But I like the metre and the rhyme scheme.

**eXtacy** · 06-22-2012

this is maybe the best i seen on here by someone with less than 50 posts.

thanks for talking about something other than money, b*tches, sex, n*ggas, thanks for not depressing me with some self-pity rap about how hard your life is or whatever

the best part about this is it is about reality. of course, improvements can be made. and those that say "its pretty weak" probably just don't understand and you will run into that from time to time. anybody that understands what your talking about i think will appreciate this

**Hycore** · 06-27-2012

I've just recently started song writing, so that means a lot and motivates me to continue, so thanks I appreciate it greatly.

Your always gonna have negative and positive feedback. I'm glad I got some positive.

The verse isn't random thoughts thrown together, It means and stands for something.

**warrenkregan** · 06-29-2012

Originally Posted by Hycore

I've just recently started song writing, so that means a lot and motivates me to continue, so thanks I appreciate it greatly.

Your always gonna have negative and positive feedback. I'm glad I got some positive.

The verse isn't random thoughts thrown together, It means and stands for something.

You just concentrate your song writing. If you have any difficulties to writing a song then consult the good lyricist.