I miss your grace

[TruthBeTold]

This is something of an usher type song, real slow and calm like. I honestly just wrote this shit off the bat. I haven't finished it either, and it's short. I just wanted to know how it sounds to everyone and if it flows real well. Hit me back with the good and bad, I need it fast. TruthBeTold.


Sitten here all alone, when I need you near,
convos on the phone, no replys what I fear,
all she left was her sweet sweet secnt, but that's not enough
girl all I crave is you, and I can't stop thinking of...

You on top of me
Grindind with my heart
and I got the stamina to take us real far

You're all I need
why'd I have to wait
I don't know how much more of this that I can take
I miss your grace

[GeekMusic]

It sounds good. I feel like if its a slow beat you can make the lyrics fit to the song. My only problems are that the last line seems out of place. It's too short and seems off beat when I put it on a song. Lastly, you can get rid of the "and"s after "girl all I crave is you" and before "i got the stamina". Just have pauses instead.

Make it longer and it'll be good.

[arjian1990]

its really hard to give you feedback, because i dont know if thats the chorus or a verse
seems like a verse, sounds decent just finish it and work on the last part but like i said dont know if its a verse or chorus.
practice makes better

[Ouija8]

not bad at all.. I like where your going with it.. keep it up.

[TruthBeTold]

arjian This is only a verse. I def need alot more practice but I'm sure I'll get to where I need to be in due time. And thank you for the response regardless if it may have been hard for you or not. Maybe I should have stated what is was first hand. I'll be sure to do that the next time. GeekMusic I can def see how the last line would feel and sound out of place, but I had a though of the beat dropping around there changing up the tempo and as well flow. something to make the song not sound so simple and blane and would reach out to others a bit more. I don't know if that might or may be a good idea but it played well in my head. I still feel the need and will peek and tweek this much more before I can honestly say it's complete single. Thank you. This is def input that I can use towards pollishing my skills in song writing. Ouija8 I def will man, thanks.