Thoughts on these lyrics?

[Tomix]

Not made for rappers, more of a slow singers style.

If the clouds want to stay
The Wolves can feast for another day
If the clouds want to stay
It'll be a long wait till May


Tell those hounds
I'm better for my wounds
Tell the highway man
The lonely always loom

Young soldier,
Bold ranger,
Being lonely makes you nobodies stranger.

 

[K-soul]

I can't sing, but the rhyme scheme is nice and the lyrics seem kinda deep. Which is my style of writing, lol. So I like it so far. Keep at it.

 

[Paul285v]

I like the bottom part but this part:

'If the clouds want to stay
The Wolves can feast for another day
If the clouds want to stay
It'll be a long wait till May'

I'm not so sure on, it sounds pretty basic and maybe it's just me but it doesn't really make sense' try changing it up using different rhymes. Why May? Does that have a meaning within the song or is it just so it fits in stay?
For me there is no real description and sense of imagery within that part and I feel you need to feel a bit more deeper and sing it a few more times, it's just too basic and boring.

I'm meaning no disrespect by the way it's all a learning process. Search more into the rhyming scheme, think about what you want to say and develop it.