Some of my best verses, inspired by Respiration and The Way I Am

nervecell

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Alright so I been obessed with writing recently and only been writing lyrics for like 5 months now but recently ive been doing it a lot and I wrote some crazy shit right now

I was reading the lyrics to respiration and the way i am a few times as i listened to the songs and then wrote some shit down

anyways here it is

the first 2 were inspired by respiration and the last one think of it in the way i am flow

1.

So much on my mind
thinking of divine beauties who refine the meaning of love
respecting all things but still chillin with thugs
you're intelligent but wasting your time so i gotta tug
and bother you some more
why do you dress and act like a whore
i see past your exterior
i over look perception and understand your interior
your mind is such a beautiful thing
and i heard your voice, girl you can sing
i believe i was sent here to teach
nurture your growth and help you to reach
all that you can be and help you see all that you can't see
theres more to life than MP3s and whats on tv
but i have to start with theory
if you don't understand then you can't hear me
ill show you whats real with the world
music so lovely it'll make you dance and twirl
and if i fail
then ill have to tell the tale
the story of the girl
who became the center of my world


2.

Defining respect is a hard thing to inspect
I see little thugs hustling well what do i expect
walking down the street, homeless begging to eat
and blackberry business men shuffling their feet
stepping out of their way just to make sure
they don't gotta pay a dolla no more
I see old ladies with grocery bags
and young men who dont offer to grab
they just keep walking til they see a pretty young thing
then holla to the point where she has to bring
some pepper spray just to feel safe
beautiful girls always feel out of place
misplace their trust to men who play them
they don't understand that they found a real gem
im seeing students who diss other students
cause one studies language to become fluent
those that diss secretly wish
that they could study as hard so their parents wouldn't *****
but the world loves to hate more than it loves to give
why can't you see jealousy is easy to outlive
the world will never change
MLK and ghandi tried and died in vein
so as long as theres television and ipods
and as long as we keep believing in god
we can't trust in ourselves
so we end up living in hell



3. so listen to this in your mind with the way i am flow

I don't know why i am the way i am
the way i grab the mic and spit when i stand
the fans do not understand that im a grown ass man
who has his own life so please just stay out
I do not have a fight left in me after i rock the mic
cause I pour my heart and soul into every show
So when the night is done im the most vulnerable so i just chill with some rum then pass out
then the very next day i do the same thing
and i know my life has just begun to begin
and i don't know if i can take another hit
from the media who blesses and curses me in the same breath
and my heart pounds in my chest
every time i force to sit and rest
cause i go so hard my friends think im obsessed
with the business so i tell them to and get me a bullet proof vest
cause im going to war so dont second guess me
when im in the mindstate to just kill so if you try to test me
then ill make you watch as i peel your skin from your skull
and hte pain just begins and i call your mom to come see
and inject her with a needle infected with HIV
filled with heroin so you are forced to watch as your mother begins
to bleed a slow and sad death all just because you decided to test
me at a time when im pissed
so just stay away when i lay awake in my bed
because im lost in my thoughts and believe that im lost
cause im so damn high all of the time
and will never come down
cause once i hit the ground
i know that my life will be done



anyways please give feedback would be greatly appreciated
 
I like this. Im def feelin the first two a little bit better, i think you probably got a little more into them and had more clear idea of what you wanted. they def flowed better. your third verse kinda had a muddled rhyme scheme. the rhythm didnt flow as well.

Anyways, keep up the work, i think you def got something to work with those first 2 verses, they seem on a similar topic.

Peace. -Jolt
 
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