Short verse I just wrote in 2 minutes

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Breeze16

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Any feedback would be greatly appreciated...

im talkin the winter time grind, theres snow on the ground
back thats ass up, drop low spin around/
n u know i been around, I'm the man I run the town
risin high ur sinkin deep like ur gonna ****in drown/
go call help, u need CPR
might stop breathin cuz U see we are
betta then what ull find at a creepy bar
or a sleezy bar, cuz indeed we are
makin girls wet like a creamy bar
stay away from cigs, dont feed me tar
fly around town in my speedy car
got a full tank thanks to my bp card

---------- Post added 03-17-2010 at 11:59 PM ---------- Previous post was 03-16-2010 at 06:14 PM ----------

dope man
 
stay away from cigs, dont feed me tar
fly around town in my speedy car
got a full tank thanks to my bp card

thats some dope ****. You gotta stay away from the cigs. I can identify because I'm asthamatic
 
yung yo stuff good so good i actually took ya first bar n used it so here it is
I’m talking the winter time grind,
No snow on the ground cause it’s all in my mind
I’m stealing your verses cause, I’m running out of lines
But you stealing my swag cause you can’t pull a dime
And this is where its at
Life is moving slow
Cameras on me
So I pull the hat low,
Birds eye view,
When I exit through the door
But when I come back
You going to be asking for some more
 
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it's cool to challenge yourself like this with time limits and what not, keep you thinking on your toes...
 
I think you should reconsider ever writing ANY verse in less 2 minutes... You clearly sound like a hobbyist that isn't really serious about their craft.
 
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