I really need help and extremely determined, I need direction big time.
I'm definitely at a amateur level but my intuition says I need to take it further.
For the past year for 2-4 hours a day I incorporated a dictionary to my flocabulary, now I'm trying to learn how to use it. I need some kind of practice regimen to be able to utilize it. I'm very happy with my cadence, voice, delivery, vocabulary but not happy with my lines.
I tend to clump syllables to much an example of something I wrote would be
"As I see my life diminishI know repentance won’t replenish
serving this sentence
Conviction for twisted intention
Lord if only I could be forgiven
Pray to the sky
Hopin your there to listen
Have my doubts
can you blame my suspicion
Livin a life stuck within this sedition
black and white the color is mission
Just a white boy from the suburbs
Submerged in disturbed verbs
Emerge from the dirt with a surge
born to perform this lyrical purge
Exert my hurt in spoken words
Never fitted in at church
Couldn’t find a priest to practiced what he’d preach
Now i feel nervous trying to find my purpose
When I feel like i’m worthless"
Something I admire and would like to write
Hopsin-
"
I'm definitely at a amateur level but my intuition says I need to take it further.
For the past year for 2-4 hours a day I incorporated a dictionary to my flocabulary, now I'm trying to learn how to use it. I need some kind of practice regimen to be able to utilize it. I'm very happy with my cadence, voice, delivery, vocabulary but not happy with my lines.
I tend to clump syllables to much an example of something I wrote would be
"As I see my life diminishI know repentance won’t replenish
serving this sentence
Conviction for twisted intention
Lord if only I could be forgiven
Pray to the sky
Hopin your there to listen
Have my doubts
can you blame my suspicion
Livin a life stuck within this sedition
black and white the color is mission
Just a white boy from the suburbs
Submerged in disturbed verbs
Emerge from the dirt with a surge
born to perform this lyrical purge
Exert my hurt in spoken words
Never fitted in at church
Couldn’t find a priest to practiced what he’d preach
Now i feel nervous trying to find my purpose
When I feel like i’m worthless"
Something I admire and would like to write
Hopsin-
"
Yo, I work hard and barely get paid, how did I get stuck on this page, I've been starving for like six days, I should go and get a switch blade, and try to find out where this ***** stays, I'm a lit flame, what's your future I predict pain, slit veins, squished brains I'm just saying, locked in the basement causes madness and errors, all I have to talk to is the ****ing man in the mirror, but you never saw it from my perspective, the craft that I perfected got rejected and thrown out the window with no proper exit, I was humble, now I'm not as pleasant"
What I feel like I'm missing is the ability to rhyme two words at the end of the line "get paid - this page - six days - switch blade - ***** stays"
Also I feel like I'm feeling I'm missing the ability to bend words "perfected - exit - pleasant"
And finally, I'm not conveying emotion as well. It sounds like a computer spitting out words that rhyme when I'm rapping.
What I been doing is sitting here for hours trying to just write lines, it's hard as hell to be really creative and pick apart words I can bend. I got the vocabulary, but having it and being able to use it are very different. Please help by giving advice on what I can add to my practice to make me better able to bend words, do double word rhymes, and convey more emotion in my lyrics.What I feel like I'm missing is the ability to rhyme two words at the end of the line "get paid - this page - six days - switch blade - ***** stays"
Also I feel like I'm feeling I'm missing the ability to bend words "perfected - exit - pleasant"
And finally, I'm not conveying emotion as well. It sounds like a computer spitting out words that rhyme when I'm rapping.
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