HI KLZ, thank you for posting feedback on my track, sorry if I am a little late returning the favor. If you feel like the synths are too "cheesy" sounding like some of the other posters have mentioned, I'd add some more voices and detune them slightly. If not, maybe a little reverb will help. I don't know how much more of the track you have, but I might add some swells with a low pass filter to produce some movement.
I think the kick drum could benefit from EQing away some of the higher frequencies of the kick, leaving a little more of a "thud" sound. Also, I think that the snare sticks out too much here. Maybe you can soften it up with EQ or possibly lower volume or try something that is a little brighter.
If you don't like the way my suggestions sound (might give too much energy ), I would at least see what you can do with the snare.
BTW, love the bit at 30 seconds, very nice touch. Let me know when you have a full thing up.
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