As mentioned above the bars are there, you need to work on your delivery tho, and the mixing isn't that well balanced imo. The overall song idea is very good tho if you could just make your words sound a lil more powerful they would do a lot more damage cuz you definitely saying something. Overall I like it especially cuz you really rappin.
Make sure to visit my thread as well and let me know what you think I'd be highly interested in hearing your thoughts. Link below.
Thanks for the honest feed guys I'll bear that in mind. Yeah I need to I need to go back and get some of that flow right. It's a tough compromise at times, though. Like I felt like the emotion was there in some places, but I sacrificed the flow. I'll look into expressing myself more on the track too.