Bass line is very cool and original! The background synth strings don't really fit that well. The concept is good but maybe look for a different type of sound. I think the flow is good, but maybe pay attention to phrasing and breathing a beat more. Sounds like you're out of breath a bit. Overall though, track is dope. Just work on it a bit, and it'll be pro material.
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Nice groovy track. Good sound selection and melodies. Only thing I would say is make that snare quieter and put some reverb on it. Also maybe try layering a punchy kick with the 808.
i really like the chord progression on this one i just think that all the sounds and mix isnt meshing well together. I really do like the idea i just think you could capitalize on it more