You definitely have a good start, but very repetitive to the point where I don't want to listen anymore. I'm not insulting it, just giving advice. It is a nice melody loop, but you need to switch things up. Cut the intro in half, add a hi hat somewhere, and add some other synths. Even muffling the whole track could be advantageous (like cutting off high and low EQs so everything sounds muffled). You have a solid start, but it just needs more work. Good stuff though so far.