The actual melody was really good. Particularly the piano running underneath the vocals.
But the track unfortunately has been been far too compressed. There are almost no dynamics in this track. None of the percussive instruments sound clear, neither do any of the synths. I think the first step should be undoing everything that was done in the mastering stage.
You can get a lot more punch without squeezing it that much. If there is an uncompressed (or at least less compressed) version, I think we can give better tips as to what to do with the mix.