Hey I like the musical ideas in this track. I think the thing that could be most improved upon is the structure. It didn't feel like a full song to me, but more of a lot of ideas. The ideas are good though. I especially liked the triplet bassy part, which sounded cool. I think the bass during that part could have been syncopated to that triplet rhythm. It was hard to tell, maybe it was, but it just needs a shorter decay on its volume envelope. It would give it some more punch if you did either of those to the bass in that part I think! Hopefully what I said made sense, if you need to me elaborate I can do so.
If you want to return the favor, here's my track.
ZachPayne - Crystal Sky [Melodic Dubstep] (Feedback for feedback)