My first song...

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Jayber.C

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Hi! I am new in this forum, and in electronic music too. A songwriter who recently fell in love with electronics and FL...
This is my first production, and should be great to have feedback from more experienced ears!
Thank!

https://youtu.be/fOD8uxhx0ig

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https://soundcloud.com/user-530183535/no-cage-instr
 
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Very good for a first track! Impressive and original, especially the intro. The riser should be removed. Maybe remove some instruments? Snare and drums could be more loud.
 
Thanks a lot!
It's been great to read your lines!
It seems to me too sometimes too "big"... so i'll make a treasure od your words.
P.s.
Why remove the riser?
 
Hi there,
first of all love the idea. pretty solid. Maybe a tad bit more side chain could improve the mix.
BTW: where do you post your tracks to get to 300 views?

Addai
 
You got a cool vibe going on in your track
Good build-up for a first track
here are some little tips to make it better,
- Try to make it more stereo, the hihats and the synths that starts when the kick comes in (Always keep the kick and snare mono)
- In your track the snare is just as important as the kick, Let it hit harder so it becomes more important
- It seems like some of sounds clash with your kick and bassline, cut the low frequencie from them under 150-250 hz, then the bassline gets more room
I hope I can help you with these tips
 
XPRSS YRSLF music said:
You got a cool vibe going on in your track
Good build-up for a first track
here are some little tips to make it better,
- Try to make it more stereo, the hihats and the synths that starts when the kick comes in (Always keep the kick and snare mono)
- In your track the snare is just as important as the kick, Let it hit harder so it becomes more important
- It seems like some of sounds clash with your kick and bassline, cut the low frequencie from them under 150-250 hz, then the bassline gets more room
I hope I can help you with these tips
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Precious tips. Thank u xym!
 
The riser sounds weird and cheesy and does not fit the track. I prefer more plain riser so it's not like - ok here's the prominent riser. The more music I make, the more I realise that every sounds should be picked carefully to fit the song. A tip is to listen to your song when you doing something else, like driving a car or something. Then you will hear things that sounds out of place or if the is something in the song that pops out either in a good/or bad way. I'm ver much an amateur myself so just take whatever I say as is.
 
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