This isn't badly produced at all and you have a good sense of how to build a track up out of loops like this.
One thing it maybe suffers from is a lack of large scale rhythmic variation- most of the loops play the same rhythm but different notes every bar / 2 bars over the 8 bar repeat period.
Another thing is the different loops are all playing on the first beat of the bar, which makes it a bit samey. Would benefit from more syncopation
