How is this mix

[charlie morgan]

Hi I have recently just put together a vocal tag/ radio ad type sound, and would just like some feedback on if its sounds good or not.

Here it is:

 

[npcaudio]

Hey, Sounds cool. The voice could be louder than the instrumental in the back, to be more catchy. Perhaps raising the voice around 3dB might help. Also, somehow I can't hear some of the "t"s, "rrrr"s and other words are a bit unclear. Are you using a "pop" removal or "breath/air" removal plugin?