What the hell is this track missing? Please do tell me.

[BobSmile]

Now I know I have to side chain everything to the kicks. So they stand out.

I don't know, it's just not hitting it.

Also need clarity right? ... How though?
^ Using 3x osc, Zeta and - Nexus, for the Swedish part.

What could I do to improve this track?

http://soundcloud.com/bob-smile/bob-smile-good-noise

Thanks for reading,

As for feedback and answers, all I could do is the same - So drop off some work :P

[ProtonKid]

Well for starters , it doesn't have any transition effects ( like risers, fade-ins , crashes, swooshes and all that ). Well it does at some point, but i think you could get some more in there just to fill out the gaps in the background.

[effusiveart]

All this track needs it talent

[HugeOProductions]

I'm not sure if it needs anything more. It's pretty good. Reminds me of a track for a car commercial. [Not that that's a bad thing.]

[BobSmile]

@ProtonKid - Yeah I'll work on that
@Effusiveart - Man get out of here with your mad ass. I asked for well constructed feedback not your useless opinion.
@Huge - Sick logo - whoever came up with that, shit... high five.

[HugeOProductions]

@Huge - Sick logo - whoever came up with that, shit... high five.

Well music wasn't my major in school (^_^). Thanks btw.

That track got contagious on me, Ima chek out your soundcloud to hear more.

[RaeTheBastard]

All this track needs it talent

Don't be a dick dude there's nothing wrong with this. I checked out your stuff, and you have no place to talk.

[alltrue]

I think it might be just a slight bit too repetitive, not too much, just a bit. The sound design is very good, great kick and clap(you can really tell they sound good at the outro). And I slightly agree with ProtonKid but I say don't focus so much on the transition effects as the transitions themselves, by adding variation and fills.

[effusiveart]

some tracks are just straight garbage. they are not worth putting the extra effort into. that is one.
and if you thank other wise you have no talent also.....................................
and if you cant take criticism music isnt for you

[RaeTheBastard]

Saying someone is talentless and their music is unsalvageable or that they should give up is not criticism it's this thing called being a ****ing dickhole and it won't get you anywhere, and from what you've made, neither will your own "talent" so maybe you could get some ****ing humility and learn something from people who actually know what they are doing. Bob, the track is good, ignore this guy.